Tabs in Death Metal!

This is just something I wrote for my band Vile Disgorgement that I think would be fun to play. There is not a lot of variation, as it is just an outline for the actual song.

(Lyrics)
(Verse 1)
I should have stayed away.
I can't stand it! It's hell!
I must not fear, stay still.
I need to escape but where?

(Chorus)
Leave me alone! (The martyrs: "come with us")
Go away! (The martyrs: "now!")
I must resist (The martyrs: "come with us")
It's a nightmare (The martyrs: "now!")
aaaaaaaaaaaaarg! (The martyrs: "You are like us, obey!)

(Verse 2)
I must wake up, I must hide.
I must make it, through the night.
I must overcome my fright,
If they smell it, I'll die

(Repeat chorus)

Not really an update as far as more music, just revised. I added a couple of drum fills to help with transitions and I changed a couple of riffs including the verse riffs and the chorus riff. Comment, rate and give feedback please ^.^

check this out and feedback PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i would like to continue to improve this song so i need critique!!!!!!! if you think you can make it better please let me know!!!!!

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Just an update. Two new riffs.

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I was thinking that this could possibly be a verse with the arpeggios being a little quieter in the back ground but since I rarely post anymore (sadly :( ) I thought I show you guys what I've come up with for my band. The scale is B harmonic minor.

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